Well, doing the manga, it started ok at first, but it just progressively got uglier and uglier. So I guess I'll go with a written story at first to try and preserve the idea, and maybe I'll go back to finish off the manga at a later date.
Anyways... Here's a terrible glimpse at what I hoped to create.
Akikedo –
*Story starts off with a shot of a building: Building is wide with open windows*
*Door is opened*
“Hey Tomo, can you help me check out what is on this camera that I found?” Tomo was the son of the family that had recently moved into the building. They owned a camera store and Tomo was helping unpack. (Parents are not around, presumably doing something somewhere else). Tomo is rummaging through boxes.
“We’ll I’m busy right now, but I guess I could. Seriously Jakku, your timing could not be any worse. Put the card into the computer over there, we’ll look at the screen over the counter top.”
As Tomo begins to scroll through the pictures with Jakku looking over his shoulder, he comes across a picture of the store that he is in. A puzzled look appears on his face, but he continues to scroll. The picture after that one is a picture of a sleeping woman. “Who’s this woman?” Tomo asks. “I’m not sure Tomo, but she’s really hot.” Tomo blinks several times and turns towards Jakku. Jakku’s voice is beginning to fade. Looking at Jakku, Tomo can’t see anything but darkness in that general direction. The only light he can see is still coming from the computer screen. Looking back at the screen, Tomo maximizes the picture of the sleeping woman. The image begins to slightly distort but then is displayed in all negative colors. (similar to the reel of camera film). Suddenly the eyes on the woman open and Tomo hears in his mind, “Why are you looking at me?” The store is revealed again, full of light. Jakku is sitting in a chair in a corner staring blankly into nothing. The door opens and the woman in the picture walks in.
“Why are you looking at me?” She repeats, but this time it is not in Tomo’s mind. Her voice is cold, she glares at Tomo. Tomo is speechless. The woman is beautiful yet terrifying. There’s also the issue of Jakku staring blankly and not doing anything in the corner. The woman strides up to Tomo, almost too quick to understand. “No one can hear you anymore” she whispers. The store distorts and a dark cement room is revealed with a dentist’s chair in the middle. “This is my world now, I am Mizuki.” Tomo glances around the room, there’s no one but Mizuki and himself left. “Now,” Mizuki repeats, “You’ll listen to my story. If you don’t figure it out, you won’t get back.” Tomo walks over to the dentist’s chair for an unknown reason and sits in it.
MIZUKI’S STORY - Akikedo
Mizuki and Tomo are seen in the room, but the room becomes smaller. The walls also becomes semi-transparent revealing that they are floating above a world on the outside. The room floats above a mansion and begins to lower. Several figures are seen below. Tomo realizes that one of them is Mizuki. Tomo looks to see if Mizuki is still in the room. She is and she is staring at the scene below.
There are 3 people below, one of them is Mizuki, the other two are unknown. However, they look like males. Each of them are using their fingers to weave strange magical colors and symbols in the air. Mizuki’s face suddenly changes as she presumably completes her symbols. The other two don’t seem to notice. “This is where she stole me.” Mizuki says from inside the bubble. Though you don’t look at the Mizuki beside you, you note that there is an acrid smell beginning to form in the room.
The two men also seem to finish up and look up. They smile and begin to fade. They do not seem to notice that Mizuki’s face is different. They begin to appear in the bubble. From your vantage from the chair, you feel exposed to the others. You begin to wonder how you were able to see the scene below while facing upwards. As the other two appear in the room, Mizuki begins to weave the strange symbols again. Both men look in shock at Mizuki. “How did you retain your powers? Who are you? The man said the method after the flood was a hoax! How do you still have your powers?”
Mizuki turns. Her back has been to you for a while now. When she turns, you groan. Her face is rotting away with the rest of her body. Mizuki’s beauty is fading fast. You groaned not in fear, but in pity for the loss of Mizuki’s appearance. It’s strange though. A light is emitting from inside the rotting flesh. “I’m not sure why either,” Mizuki replied, “but I think it has something to do with the woman down there.” As the other two look down and begin discussing amongst themselves. Mizuki turns to you and begins to explain. “The flood ritual is used for us to come to this location. Though our location is reflective of both a location we deem is highly unaesthetic and holds an object we deem to be extremely uncomfortable, it allows for us to live forever without a body. There’s only one problem. I showed up in here with my body. With my body, I can continue to weave magic, but I continue to die. My friends there cannot weave magic anymore, but they cannot die as long as they are in the room.” Mizuki on the world below looks puzzled. Again, she begins to weave symbols in the air. She begins to fade and the room begins to change. The walls turn a faded yellow and the chair Tomo is sitting on begins to change into a bed covered with frilly and lacy items. The flesh on Mizuki’s body has fully decayed revealing a blueish hue in the shape of a woman. It does not move. The two men quickly run up saying, “We must protect her life force!” As they grab her hands, they too turn blue and none of them move again.
A red hue of a woman is beginning to form in the room. The room is solidifying. “Mizuki?” Tomo asks. “No… my name is Abigail”
ABIGAIL’S STORY – Aibifkedo
(The story of the woman destroyed by others)
IDEA:
The premise of the story is somewhat of a thriller/horror. Tomo (Stupid name, I know) is supposed to unlock a supernatural being whom is tied to the world. The being is similar to a "ghost" per se. However, the being is a chimera of ghosted beings. (Women in this case) But shows only one look/image at a time. Each woman's story is unraveled one at a time, each usually with a story that is disturbing to say the least. Mizuki's story "goes first" but that's not the actual story that bound her to the current being. Each woman's story is somehow interconnected, but they never knew each other. (In fact, some live in different time frames. There was the "original 2, and the 2 whom were added after".
The premise of the idea of the story is that the protagonist is watching the story of the others in the first person yet third person at the same time. Similar to the premise of the game "fatal frame" the protagonist must gather information of the "subject" at hand. Unlike the game, the subject is learning this in reverse. You do not know the story first, you learn it after while "watching the scene from both first and third person".
The floating room takes ideas from 3 locales. #1: Silent hill. You live in a world tied off to the other, even though you can see the outside, the outside cannot see you. #2: Gantz (to a certain extent). Again, you're in a room tied off from the world. But unlike Silent hill in which you still fight, the premise of the fight is different. I'll continue to explain in a moment. #3: A christmas story - As Ebenezer scrooge, you watch life past present and future. You watch as an entity engaged, yet unable to engage at the same time.
As I stated before. The story plays out like a game. (Video game to be clear) however, it moves in both the first AND third person. The third person POV is oblivious to the first person POV and vice versa. Tomo will see woman below but there are people following the woman. Each person will be different. and unknown to Tomo. One will have the mind of Tomo, the others will either be there to try and help Tomo or the woman. There are also others whom will try to sabotage either Tomo and/or the woman.
Connective ties:
#1: Silent Hill: You're boxed off and sent to an area. Unlike Silent Hill, you're sent to a real area, not an alternate reality. However you are fully interactive your surroundings. (1st person)
#2: Gantz: You're boxed off and sent to an area. Like Gantz, the area is a "real world" area. Unlike Gantz, you're not passing by without real world damage or not noticed by real world people. You are within the surrounding and fully interactive. (1st person)
#3: Scrooge: You're not boxed off. You're not noticed by anyone. You watch the event unfold. (It's not a game, but the story is played out like one)
3rd person: You learn things and put hints in certain "connective areas". However, you don't know who will get your information. You will learn this at a later date though that you cannot choose who gets the information. (In fact, the information falling in the wrong hands is what makes you alter your information.) So you fall into the confusion of, "Do I put in hints which take time to solve?" or do I put in blatant information that changes the flow of the "game"? You get to watch the game 15 minutes in advance. That's all.
1st person: You learn things and can get information or hints in the "connective areas". You have a mission that you are given at the beginning of the "game". You have to figure out how to complete it though. Also, you cannot be sure that people you interact with will help you. Sabotage can be blatant, or unknown. (Someone leading you astray by accident)
There is no time limit, but if something happens that is contrary to your mission objective. You lose. So if your objective per se was to "Sabotage someone else" by keeping them away from a location, then if the person gets to the location, you lose. etc.
Mizuki is shown to be frozen in "blue". She can only be unfrozen when her story is "gamed". Unfrozen either releases her, or will rebind her back to the entity.
Abigail will be the first "game" played out. This is actually just an intro... one full of shit.
In any case, Abigail will be a woman who lives in a "real world" by which she is capable of magic, exceptional dexterity. But will have human like abilities. (Her magic is limited to destruction and the "flood ritual")
Woman A will be one incapable of magic. However, she will be given one or two attributes that are "not normal" to our reality.
Mizuki will not have any abnormal attributes, but she will have high levels of cunning.
Woman B will also be capable of magic another overly high attribute, but remainder human attributes.
Figured it out yet? Abigail and B will be in the same "game". They are tied. But they don't actually see each other in the game, but each's actions will affect each other.
Mizuki and B will be in the same "game". Same as above.
Tomo must "play" all 4 "games" to reveal the last stage to release the girls. Tomo might run into himself again after playing for the second time, but he won't know it until the second game.
What is revealed? Unknown.
In any case, it plays more like a video game with a shitload of cuts cenes than an actual story. So it's somewhat like a Video game, but more like a manga in a sense as well.
