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Story: Based on a dream
« on: September 28, 2010, 05:52:55 AM »
Ok... I know at the beginning of summer, I was considering writing the multiple perception story about the post apocalypic world... but somehow I couldn't get into it...

HOWEVER, about a month ago, I had an odd dream. So I wrote it down and made a few revisions to it with a few oldie bkbt ppls (generally just adding missed details from the dream. Trying to keep it true to the original dream). It's disjointed, I know. It's a dream. They don't make sense. So read at your own preference. I hope it actually fits as a post... we'll see. Let's just keep this from being a psychoanalysis of fohfoh, k?

(I'm not sure if this was the "final draft". Hopefully it is)

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Re: Story: Based on a dream
« Reply #1 on: September 28, 2010, 07:02:32 AM »
Lol. tl;dr

I'm also tired...
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Re: Story: Based on a dream
« Reply #2 on: September 28, 2010, 07:04:14 AM »
Lol. tl;dr

I'm also tired...

Obviously, It's a short story.

It's not meant to wow people or change life.
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Re: Story: Based on a dream
« Reply #3 on: September 28, 2010, 09:22:57 AM »
I think this is an actually kinda nice short story and have it's own completeness. Especially I like the lovely ending and the beginning part that described the main character was fainted away without any reasons. that's kinda weird but still fine to me. Also, established kinda fantastic mood successfully from there. However, I like it. Other opinions  ???

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Re: Story: Based on a dream
« Reply #4 on: September 28, 2010, 01:50:11 PM »
First of all seriously man you are overthinking your dreams...(do you have narration in your dreams???)
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Re: Story: Based on a dream
« Reply #5 on: September 28, 2010, 03:15:23 PM »
First of all seriously man you are overthinking your dreams...(do you have narration in your dreams???)
well, some people (like me) get very detailed dreams, and I too have written notes of them down at some point, with the intention of writing them proper. never got around to doing it but still....

well well... It was nice and simple, nothing outrageously disjointed but a little lack of detail (although, dreams don't go into detail... you just sorta know the details, inexplicably) Last para and line were killer (no pun intended) and overall nice, short and sweet! (Rather like Yuki :3)
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Re: Story: Based on a dream
« Reply #6 on: September 28, 2010, 07:08:04 PM »
First of all seriously man you are overthinking your dreams...(do you have narration in your dreams???)

Like I said, it was based on my dream. The narration is added. That's because this dream was seen in the first person with barely any dialogue.

The oddity of the dream actually lies in the fact that it goes from 1st person to 3rd person. I wasn't able to explain this within the way it was written, but actually, the "scene" after the stall part was almost all in 3rd person. (The character is seen). 

I'm not sure about the over thinking part, because I tried not to analyze it but write it "as is". The "scenes" were essentially shown, and then you're in the next one without knowing how it connected to the prior one (though it certainly feels like it's connected with the prior scene).

If I did have to analyze though, it would be based on the last statement on most of the paragraphs. There is a feeling that time isn't "flowing" correctly. afternoon, evening and night are in sequence, then (is supposed to be morning), noon and evening with a 3rd evening that's full of gloom. The first 2 "sets" feel like 1 day. The last gloomy evening feels like days, weeks or even months later. Like I said... it "feels". Another being the fruit and the phone. Everything else in the story seems real, but the fruit seems, odd. It's not a real fruit, nor is the black "decay" something that seems like an actual thing in our world. The phone is another, and I guess it's because of the way that I "saw" the dream and you the reader my visualize it. But in this dream, the whole area seems like a multi-layered small town. The market area feels like a festival that you'd see characters in animes participate in. There's very little technology. Also, there was no way to signify the gasoline as gasoline. It just behaved visually as gasoline.

This story/project was actually inspired by a social psychology class I took. The premise is actually based on sleep studies and differing brain waves. I thought the dream was odd enough to try and recall. You'd be surprised the amount of detail you can remember if you are able to capture the key words, concepts before you forget it.

If anyone is confused at anything, I can try and explain. There's details I had no idea how to incorporate into the narrative. There are things I can parallel that are similar to anime, but those are only after-analysis, and not actually part of the dream.
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Re: Story: Based on a dream
« Reply #7 on: September 29, 2010, 08:47:26 AM »
First of all seriously man you are overthinking your dreams...(do you have narration in your dreams???)

Like I said, it was based on my dream. The narration is added. That's because this dream was seen in the first person with barely any dialogue.

The oddity of the dream actually lies in the fact that it goes from 1st person to 3rd person. I wasn't able to explain this within the way it was written, but actually, the "scene" after the stall part was almost all in 3rd person. (The character is seen). 

I'm not sure about the over thinking part, because I tried not to analyze it but write it "as is". The "scenes" were essentially shown, and then you're in the next one without knowing how it connected to the prior one (though it certainly feels like it's connected with the prior scene).

If I did have to analyze though, it would be based on the last statement on most of the paragraphs. There is a feeling that time isn't "flowing" correctly. afternoon, evening and night are in sequence, then (is supposed to be morning), noon and evening with a 3rd evening that's full of gloom. The first 2 "sets" feel like 1 day. The last gloomy evening feels like days, weeks or even months later. Like I said... it "feels". Another being the fruit and the phone. Everything else in the story seems real, but the fruit seems, odd. It's not a real fruit, nor is the black "decay" something that seems like an actual thing in our world. The phone is another, and I guess it's because of the way that I "saw" the dream and you the reader my visualize it. But in this dream, the whole area seems like a multi-layered small town. The market area feels like a festival that you'd see characters in animes participate in. There's very little technology. Also, there was no way to signify the gasoline as gasoline. It just behaved visually as gasoline.

This story/project was actually inspired by a social psychology class I took. The premise is actually based on sleep studies and differing brain waves. I thought the dream was odd enough to try and recall. You'd be surprised the amount of detail you can remember if you are able to capture the key words, concepts before you forget it.

If anyone is confused at anything, I can try and explain. There's details I had no idea how to incorporate into the narrative. There are things I can parallel that are similar to anime, but those are only after-analysis, and not actually part of the dream.
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Re: Story: Based on a dream
« Reply #8 on: September 29, 2010, 02:50:29 PM »
This story/project was actually inspired by a social psychology class I took. The premise is actually based on sleep studies and differing brain waves. I thought the dream was odd enough to try and recall. You'd be surprised the amount of detail you can remember if you are able to capture the key words, concepts before you forget it. 

Psychology eh? elaborate plz
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Re: Story: Based on a dream
« Reply #9 on: September 29, 2010, 04:38:06 PM »
This story/project was actually inspired by a social psychology class I took. The premise is actually based on sleep studies and differing brain waves. I thought the dream was odd enough to try and recall. You'd be surprised the amount of detail you can remember if you are able to capture the key words, concepts before you forget it. 

Psychology eh? elaborate plz

It was based on sleep patterns. REM sleep, delta waves etc. that type of thing. That section of the class was based on a video that showed and outlined a sleep study that was done on participants. Participants were given a notebook and their brainwaves monitored. Once they hit a certain wave, they were "forced" awake and requested to write down on a pad and paper what they had just been dreaming. They were then requested to go back to sleep and the process was restarted again for different brain wave types.

Certain types of brain waves usually yielded an individual running over past experiences. The example was a tactile snowboard arcade game which the participants either played only once or twice, or continuously. Those who played once or twice, and even those who played continuously showed the greatest improvement after "sleeping on it". It generally had the idea of "simulation".

Certain types of brain waves were also sort of like simulation, but also "testing the realities of the "real world". Generally the "odd dreams". The example in here was an individual who claimed he had a dream where there was a grasshopper in his kitchen chatting with him or something.

Testing was also done in the REM state (rapid eye movement) and non-rapid eye movement. I'm not fully sure about this one, but I think they also confirmed that you can dream without REM.


But sleep study format in that representation.

1. Participant sleeps in a "clinical bed". Basic with a table beside the bed. On the table is a notebook and pen.
2. Participant is hooked up to all sorts of monitoring equipment. Video recording equipment is also set up
3. Participant goes to sleep and is woken in certain time intervals (which generally are "transition time intervals" from a certain brain waves to different brain waves)
4. Results are recorded each time the participant is woken up by the researchers as well as the participant. (Participant records the dreams, researchers record the physical state)
5. Comparison and reflection is done the next day.
5a. participants are requested to recompile the dream.

 This is also repeated with individuals who don't write anything down. Those who record on notebooks remember way more than those who don't.
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Re: Story: Based on a dream
« Reply #10 on: September 29, 2010, 04:50:27 PM »
Dreams are an awesome way to get an idea for a story.

(Didn't read all of yours, but I will eventually... I promise!



Back on March 27th I had a dream I never wanted to forget, so I wrote it down.  (And yeah, I'm one of those people with fairly detailed dreams)


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Very rough, but I pretty much woke up and wrote it down...  Haven't edited it or anything since.

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Re: Story: Based on a dream
« Reply #11 on: September 29, 2010, 07:10:56 PM »
This story/project was actually inspired by a social psychology class I took. The premise is actually based on sleep studies and differing brain waves. I thought the dream was odd enough to try and recall. You'd be surprised the amount of detail you can remember if you are able to capture the key words, concepts before you forget it. 

Psychology eh? elaborate plz

It was based on sleep patterns. REM sleep, delta waves etc. that type of thing. That section of the class was based on a video that showed and outlined a sleep study that was done on participants. Participants were given a notebook and their brainwaves monitored. Once they hit a certain wave, they were "forced" awake and requested to write down on a pad and paper what they had just been dreaming. They were then requested to go back to sleep and the process was restarted again for different brain wave types.

Certain types of brain waves usually yielded an individual running over past experiences. The example was a tactile snowboard arcade game which the participants either played only once or twice, or continuously. Those who played once or twice, and even those who played continuously showed the greatest improvement after "sleeping on it". It generally had the idea of "simulation".

Certain types of brain waves were also sort of like simulation, but also "testing the realities of the "real world". Generally the "odd dreams". The example in here was an individual who claimed he had a dream where there was a grasshopper in his kitchen chatting with him or something.

Testing was also done in the REM state (rapid eye movement) and non-rapid eye movement. I'm not fully sure about this one, but I think they also confirmed that you can dream without REM.


But sleep study format in that representation.

1. Participant sleeps in a "clinical bed". Basic with a table beside the bed. On the table is a notebook and pen.
2. Participant is hooked up to all sorts of monitoring equipment. Video recording equipment is also set up
3. Participant goes to sleep and is woken in certain time intervals (which generally are "transition time intervals" from a certain brain waves to different brain waves)
4. Results are recorded each time the participant is woken up by the researchers as well as the participant. (Participant records the dreams, researchers record the physical state)
5. Comparison and reflection is done the next day.
5a. participants are requested to recompile the dream.

 This is also repeated with individuals who don't write anything down. Those who record on notebooks remember way more than those who don't.

Well, isn't that something... I always though you had to be in REM mode to dream
but I can totally back up the whole "sleep on it" thing... you run through thing in your head and you get better at it... mentaly
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Re: Story: Based on a dream
« Reply #12 on: September 29, 2010, 08:34:23 PM »
You, sir, watch too much anime.  :P

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Re: Story: Based on a dream
« Reply #13 on: September 29, 2010, 10:41:52 PM »
You, sir, watch too much anime.  :P

Me? I actually watch a lot of asian dramas... :P Lots more than anime.
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Re: Story: Based on a dream
« Reply #14 on: September 30, 2010, 02:41:11 PM »
You, sir, watch too much anime.  :P

Me? I actually watch a lot of asian dramas... :P Lots more than anime.
Asian Dramas????No no no i will try to make myself stronger so i wont judge what you do....no no no..it is your choice yeah...fuck i want to say somethin.... :)
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Re: Story: Based on a dream
« Reply #15 on: September 30, 2010, 03:38:17 PM »
psychology update!
apparently, running long distance means that your brain becomes so occupied with running, that it enters a near sleep mode (ie the patterns for certain areas resemble those of sleep) the theory is that cross country runners can do that thing where they improve at a repetitive task in their sleep... without sleeping
You, sir, watch too much anime.  :P

Me? I actually watch a lot of asian dramas... :P Lots more than anime.
Asian Dramas????No no no i will try to make myself stronger so i wont judge what you do....no no no..it is your choice yeah...fuck i want to say somethin.... :)

lol, indeed... My sister watches Asian dramas, and while some are god awful, some ARE genuinely good... honestly!
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Re: Story: Based on a dream
« Reply #16 on: September 30, 2010, 04:19:54 PM »
psychology update!
apparently, running long distance means that your brain becomes so occupied with running, that it enters a near sleep mode (ie the patterns for certain areas resemble those of sleep) the theory is that cross country runners can do that thing where they improve at a repetitive task in their sleep... without sleeping
You, sir, watch too much anime.  :P

Me? I actually watch a lot of asian dramas... :P Lots more than anime.
Asian Dramas????No no no i will try to make myself stronger so i wont judge what you do....no no no..it is your choice yeah...fuck i want to say somethin.... :)

lol, indeed... My sister watches Asian dramas, and while some are god awful, some ARE genuinely good... honestly!
I did not mean it in a bad way i think it just doesnt stick with fohfoh's image....
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Re: Story: Based on a dream
« Reply #17 on: September 30, 2010, 05:22:01 PM »
lol it sounded as if it were a bad thing
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« Reply #18 on: September 30, 2010, 07:04:29 PM »
I have my own story contribution to this thread.  I wrote this last year for my grade 9 english class.


   
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Re: Story: Based on a dream
« Reply #19 on: October 01, 2010, 04:12:44 PM »
and now I'm all sad :'(
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