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My first book.

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--- Quote from: Xenoran on December 03, 2010, 01:55:41 PM ---Alice is a real person born a real person but was given to the compony for research atleast thats how i have it written in my notebook and in my head

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Yeah, I read the entire thing. It's nice, the prologue. The ch 1 seems that she has woke up from the state of (*a concussion?*) coma? Well, that's nice. The girl seems to become a guinea pig for stuff. But what stuff? Maybe some experimental meds? It might give her more abilities like increased neuron activity and durability that she can have ESP?

I suggest you make a profile of the characters before you have first started the story. It can help with making characters more believable. Advantage also is that the characters will be in one place aside your brain so that you can able to free your mind at some point (saving neurons in the process).

Other dudes, hope I got that right.

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