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eclectic:
yay! someone other than me posted something!

will take a look at it while flying tomorrow and respond (prolly a pm?) to you with some feedback.

kitamesume:
actually i got two stories in progress, that one seems to be enough to close the first book and issue a continuation later on. the other is still like a rough draft, pure thoughts and no connection to each other, gonna connect them later if it has enough ideas in it. want me to post it?

eclectic:
s'up to you. it may take a while to get to both. i leave for Kyoto tomorrow and the next week+ is a little crazy. whatever you post i will take a look at though.

kitamesume:

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Ironworks Castle - Cityhall in the mainland of Felmorel.
King Westler G(George). Victor the Sixth - Current King of Felmorel.
King Revearth T(Tristan). Jonas the third - Current king of Zian.
Archbishop Seigh - Hidden arm of the King, keeper of the forbidden Library.
Forbidden Library - here lies thousands of mankind's hystories that are bound by taboos.
Fallen - a race of a different world that evolved from a dying world, Reverent.
Hiarch - a dweller of a different world that aided the people of Sigal.
Sigal - 5th planet of the Io Star system, has 8 countries. 14months and 28days a month.
Io Star system - it is a star system with 15 planets.
Archon - is the 2nd planet of star millen, it has 4months and 2016hrs a month, day and night lasts 1008hrs as the planet can only do 4 full rotations each year.
Reverent - is the 1st planet of Star Narad, it is the home planet of The Fallen.
Triad Star system - it is a star system with 3Stars and 6planets. it is a multiple star system that are near each other.
Voral - 1st star of Triad star system
Millen - 2nd star of Triad Star system
Narad - 3rd star of Triad star system

Deloress - Center South country of Planet Sigal
Dile - Mainland of Deloress

Felmorel - Center North country of Planet Sigal
Nille - Mainland of Felmorel

Zian - South East Country of Planet Sigal
Pertual - Mainland of Zian


-prologue : Meeting-

Year 659 14th, 28, Nille, Mainland of Felmorel, a stormy night just as the clocktower of the city hall strikes 12:00 mn, echoing through out the city, a world summoning is being held in the Mainland's city hall, also known as the Ironworks Castle.
"Greetings Fellow people, as you may have heard, there has been a crysis in our world, unknown beings spawns all over the world as we speak, we do not know where they are from, but we do know that most of them are dangerous enough to be left roaming
around" King Westler spoke, "your highness, do we have to evacuate the southern Nille? there have been too many of these "things" sighted, we do not have much casualties yet but the public is getting too agitated over the growing numbers of them"
Spoke the governor of Xille, "We do not need to evacuate the cities yet, i`m declaring martial law over the country to keep the public safe, additional rules would be to stay away from those even in the morning, any people sighted past beyond 10pm
is to be confined in the City Jail" spoke the King, "Your Highness, can we plea for assistance on our country Zian? almost half of our country is flooded with these "things", we already evacuated our Mainland and two major cities" King Revearth spoke,
"I can take refuge over the northern Nille, there have been no sights of those "things" so far" King Westler spoke, "please refrain from calling it 'things','these'or'them', their race do have a name, they're called Fallen, more like phantoms if you
compare them on child's stories, they have been written in history deep inside the forbidden library. here, your highness, let me read the contents for you" said the archbishop Seigh

"Year 248 12th, 22, these things have started appearing, they were sinister and a mysterious aura surrounds them, we witnessed one of their summonings, they were some kind of beings that are from another world, passing through a dark void that opens
on places, anything they touch seems to rot and wither. Year 248 14th, 24, the whole country is flooded with the creatures, we were forced to take refuge inside the IronWorks Castle. a new being emerged and started fighting off the creatures, they
introduced them selves as the Hiarch dwellers 'forgive us for arriving late, we are the Hiarch, fear not for we come to help and aid you on your stand' they explained the situation to us 'these beings are no ordinary creatures, they are the Fallen race of a dark planet, this
planet has died along time ago, but a phenomena happened, few beings emerged and started to form, they released a sinister aura vast enough to alarm our world, they formed from the decaying life of the planet's vengeance, phantoms if you call it. we
do not know their purpose but we have to stop them' they also mentioned that it is not only our country who is suffering from the Fallen's invasion, the whole world is-"

archbishop Seigh continues "my apologise your highness, but the scroll is torn and the rest of the documents are missing." Archbishop Seigh said "Worry not, you did what you could, the information is enough, but the way on how to defeat those so called
Fallen it are missing, if we could just contact these so called Hiarch race." King Westler said.


-Act1 : Awakening-

Year 650 2nd, 04, Two months have passed since the start of the invasion. Southern Nille, "everyone please remain calm, we are evacuating the city, as of this moment, please gather your belongings and head to the destined pick up site, please refrain
from bringing anything unnecessary" military propaganda announced "any injured will be treated in the medical camp". 15minutes later, "i got to hurry home and help mom pack the stuffs"

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notes and ideas:
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the clan, or to be precise, the Ninetails clan, was a well known powerful clan that uses the flame element but there's a little problem to their clan, the members of their clan is only a handful, the reason for this is the absolute rule "no one is permitted to cross blood with any race other than the fox race" still, loving another race is allowed, but having children is forbidden, it was a rule to maintain the pure bloods.

the founder of the clan was the most powerful ever walked on our planet, she was the only nine tailed fox which contributed to our current peaceful society until the fifth generation, the second Ninetail was born into the clan, her name was Trisha Ninetails.

at a young age of 9 she already surpassed the founder in both power and abilities, the most surprise was her ability to use other element other than the flame, she could adapt and use the wind, the earth and the water for which is a first in history, no being has ever managed to control more than two elements, the current user that has managed to learn two elements is the current emperor, he has mastered both the lightning element and the wind element.

until Trisha fell in love with a man from your world that came with us after the fight 400 years ago to learn our ways of living, at first it was not disturbing, even the townsfolk knew their affair but in just a single night the Ninetails clan went into an uproar, the man broke the taboo and mated with Trisha, the issue was not known until the child was born, a bloody trial started after that and lasted for 2years.

Their elders was not too cruel as they've thought, the elders gave them a last hope, be it a wish or a request, it decided the outcome of today's standing. their request was to spare the child and take their lives instead, the elders took argument over the request and came to a conclusion for it "the child is spared if there will be a godfather to volunteer, as for the punishment for the parents, the father will be executed as he has broken the absolute taboo, but the mother shall be spared on one condition, she shall be imprisoned in the spirits vault and be serving for the world council for the rest of her life and she is forbidden to see her daughter unless if necessary".

before the punishment was settled, they gave them a chance to name the child, of course it was the parent's joy to name a child, they settled on the name Natasha Ninetails but no one volunteered to take care of the child, it was problematic for the council as it contradicts with the last request, then that's where i took her and became a godfather but additionally i proposed the soul container, it is a spell which seals the soul and let it substitute for a body's soul.

the preparations of the container took 10years to complete and Natasha knew what its supposed to be and who's it for, containing Natasha's soul was easy but this spell was in it's early stages so it took 100years to even manage to settle the seal on the container and another troublesome part, no suitable body was available on that day, 300years passed then i saw a ray of hope, your original child was born missing a soul, or dead in your terms, i don't know if you were grateful but i apologize for this.

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(click to show/hide)Ironworks Castle - Cityhall in the mainland of Felmorel.
King Westler G(George). Victor the Sixth - Current King of Felmorel.
King Revearth T(Tristan). Jonas the third - Current king of Zian.
Archbishop Seigh - Hidden arm of the King, keeper of the forbidden Library.
Forbidden Library - here lies thousands of mankind's hystories that are bound by taboos.
Fallen - a race of a different world that evolved from a dying world, Reverent.
Hiarch - a dweller of a different world that aided the people of Sigal.
Sigal - 5th planet of the Io Star system, has 8 countries. 14months and 28days a month.
Io Star system - it is a star system with 15 planets.
Archon - is the 2nd planet of star millen, it has 4months and 2016hrs a month, day and night lasts 1008hrs as the planet can only do 4 full rotations each year.
Reverent - is the 1st planet of Star Narad, it is the home planet of The Fallen.
Triad Star system - it is a star system with 3Stars and 6planets. it is a multiple star system that are near each other.
Voral - 1st star of Triad star system
Millen - 2nd star of Triad Star system
Narad - 3rd star of Triad star system

Deloress - Center South country of Planet Sigal
Dile - Mainland of Deloress

Felmorel - Center North country of Planet Sigal
Nille - Mainland of Felmorel

Zian - South East Country of Planet Sigal
Pertual - Mainland of Zian


-prologue : Meeting-

Year 659 14th, 28, Nille, Mainland of Felmorel, a stormy night just as the clocktower of the city hall strikes 12:00 mn, echoing through out the city, a world summoning is being held in the Mainland's city hall, also known as the Ironworks Castle.
"Greetings Fellow people, as you may have heard, there has been a crysis in our world, unknown beings spawns all over the world as we speak, we do not know where they are from, but we do know that most of them are dangerous enough to be left roaming
around" King Westler spoke, "your highness, do we have to evacuate the southern Nille? there have been too many of these "things" sighted, we do not have much casualties yet but the public is getting too agitated over the growing numbers of them"
Spoke the governor of Xille, "We do not need to evacuate the cities yet, i`m declaring martial law over the country to keep the public safe, additional rules would be to stay away from those even in the morning, any people sighted past beyond 10pm
is to be confined in the City Jail" spoke the King, "Your Highness, can we plea for assistance on our country Zian? almost half of our country is flooded with these "things", we already evacuated our Mainland and two major cities" King Revearth spoke,
"I can take refuge over the northern Nille, there have been no sights of those "things" so far" King Westler spoke, "please refrain from calling it 'things','these'or'them', their race do have a name, they're called Fallen, more like phantoms if you
compare them on child's stories, they have been written in history deep inside the forbidden library. here, your highness, let me read the contents for you" said the archbishop Seigh

"Year 248 12th, 22, these things have started appearing, they were sinister and a mysterious aura surrounds them, we witnessed one of their summonings, they were some kind of beings that are from another world, passing through a dark void that opens
on places, anything they touch seems to rot and wither. Year 248 14th, 24, the whole country is flooded with the creatures, we were forced to take refuge inside the IronWorks Castle. a new being emerged and started fighting off the creatures, they
introduced them selves as the Hiarch dwellers 'forgive us for arriving late, we are the Hiarch, fear not for we come to help and aid you on your stand' they explained the situation to us 'these beings are no ordinary creatures, they are the Fallen race of a dark planet, this
planet has died along time ago, but a phenomena happened, few beings emerged and started to form, they released a sinister aura vast enough to alarm our world, they formed from the decaying life of the planet's vengeance, phantoms if you call it. we
do not know their purpose but we have to stop them' they also mentioned that it is not only our country who is suffering from the Fallen's invasion, the whole world is-"

archbishop Seigh continues "my apologise your highness, but the scroll is torn and the rest of the documents are missing." Archbishop Seigh said "Worry not, you did what you could, the information is enough, but the way on how to defeat those so called
Fallen it are missing, if we could just contact these so called Hiarch race." King Westler said.


-Act1 : Awakening-

Year 650 2nd, 04, Two months have passed since the start of the invasion. Southern Nille, "everyone please remain calm, we are evacuating the city, as of this moment, please gather your belongings and head to the destined pick up site, please refrain
from bringing anything unnecessary" military propaganda announced "any injured will be treated in the medical camp". 15minutes later, "i got to hurry home and help mom pack the stuffs"

----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
notes and ideas:
----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
the clan, or to be precise, the Ninetails clan, was a well known powerful clan that uses the flame element but there's a little problem to their clan, the members of their clan is only a handful, the reason for this is the absolute rule "no one is permitted to cross blood with any race other than the fox race" still, loving another race is allowed, but having children is forbidden, it was a rule to maintain the pure bloods.

the founder of the clan was the most powerful ever walked on our planet, she was the only nine tailed fox which contributed to our current peaceful society until the fifth generation, the second Ninetail was born into the clan, her name was Trisha Ninetails.

at a young age of 9 she already surpassed the founder in both power and abilities, the most surprise was her ability to use other element other than the flame, she could adapt and use the wind, the earth and the water for which is a first in history, no being has ever managed to control more than two elements, the current user that has managed to learn two elements is the current emperor, he has mastered both the lightning element and the wind element.

until Trisha fell in love with a man from your world that came with us after the fight 400 years ago to learn our ways of living, at first it was not disturbing, even the townsfolk knew their affair but in just a single night the Ninetails clan went into an uproar, the man broke the taboo and mated with Trisha, the issue was not known until the child was born, a bloody trial started after that and lasted for 2years.

Their elders was not too cruel as they've thought, the elders gave them a last hope, be it a wish or a request, it decided the outcome of today's standing. their request was to spare the child and take their lives instead, the elders took argument over the request and came to a conclusion for it "the child is spared if there will be a godfather to volunteer, as for the punishment for the parents, the father will be executed as he has broken the absolute taboo, but the mother shall be spared on one condition, she shall be imprisoned in the spirits vault and be serving for the world council for the rest of her life and she is forbidden to see her daughter unless if necessary".

before the punishment was settled, they gave them a chance to name the child, of course it was the parent's joy to name a child, they settled on the name Natasha Ninetails but no one volunteered to take care of the child, it was problematic for the council as it contradicts with the last request, then that's where i took her and became a godfather but additionally i proposed the soul container, it is a spell which seals the soul and let it substitute for a body's soul.

the preparations of the container took 10years to complete and Natasha knew what its supposed to be and who's it for, containing Natasha's soul was easy but this spell was in it's early stages so it took 100years to even manage to settle the seal on the container and another troublesome part, no suitable body was available on that day, 300years passed then i saw a ray of hope, your original child was born missing a soul, or dead in your terms, i don't know if you were grateful but i apologize for this.

well then i`d post it here, might get some more ideas from people's comments.
this was entirely my imagination, i dont know what influenced me but meh, i pretty much think its original.
and again, sorry for the bad grammar, this time its seriously bad because its just a compilation of ideas with a few connections.

Micharus:

--- Quote from: eclectic on June 19, 2011, 06:56:02 AM ---my more current stuff is on my site: http://oddlypopulated.blogspot.com/
the novel is a little, uh, long. and needs MASSIVE fixes.

i am actually surprised that there is that much interest in poetry. i would never have thought to try something like an epic poem...curious.

TiYler, if you post stuff i will try to give some feedback.

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Hmmm.

I'm kinda interested. I may go and have a look, possibly read the novel, despite not really liking to read novels on-line.
I prefer to have a book in my hands when I'm reading a story.

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